And sure enough there he was, all 3inch 4 of him. With his broad shoulders, his military cut, and that stupid simile across his face. But Anwen didn't want to talk to him right now, she didn't want to talk to anyone right now, she just wanted to get to Ffione's house and think. But there was no way avoiding him, he was making a Beeline for her and she was surrounded by the crowd trying to get out of the gathering place, so she was going to have to talk to him.
As he approached, she stood her ground and waited for him to reach her.
When he did, he said in a casual, "hey Anwen, what do you think about being partners?" she didn't reply, she just kept looking at him with a expressionless face, so Trince pressed forward. He talked about plans for the competition, and ways to out smart Narzelda and Qwenerth, but Anwen really wasn't listening. She was waiting politely for him to finish so she could leave, but then he said something that caught her attention. " I really think your parents would be proud."
Anwen stopped; she never really talked about her parents. It wasn't a touchy subject, but no one gave Trince permission to talk to her about them. Now she really didn't want to talk to him, so she broke the awkward silence by saying she had to go, and she flew out of the gathering place leaving Trince standing there all alone.
When she got to her and Ffion's house she was greeted by all of Ffion's little brothers and sisters, she got past them by smiling and by giving an occasional hug so she could go inside the grass hut to the room her and Ffion shared. When she got there she wasn't surprised to see that Ffion wasn't there, with Ffion being a blonde she was probably on a date or something, but this time Anwen was glad to be alone. Then she layed down on her hay bed to think, mainly about the competition, but her thoughts drifted to her parents and how they died. She remembered first how a boy in her age group named Iorworth suddenly vanished with his mysterious father, then a few years later his father suddenly appeared again threatening the Bind and wanting control of it. Then she remembered when her father conquered Iorworth's father and killed him and saved the bind, she didn't know why she thought about this, it really didn't have anything to do with her parents death, but she did always think of her father as the big military person he was and that memory was the one that reminded her most of him in that way. Then her thoughts drifted to the day her parents died, they both left on a military job just to check something out about the Bind's security, but there was an ambush on the way and both of them were killed. At this point in her thoughts Anwen had a large lump in her throat, she got off her bed and headed to the door. She was going to go find Trince and actually listen to his plans for the binder hood competition, anything was better then thinking about this; anything.
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Interesting. I don't dislike it- I actually like the questions it brings up- but I don't know what I think about the way it's put. There are parts of it I don't like- oh well, off to read the other paragraphs@
I don't like how she introduces the character Iorwerth and I don't know how I like how she talked about Anwen's parents death. We know for sure that her parents are dead but the four of us have been duking out how the died. It's still a okay paragraph but if it won she'd have to go talk to Trince, something that is an akward thing for me to write, I rather just get on to the next day or something. Pretty much what I'm tring to say is that I would rather all the information be introduced in a different way.
I also don't like the way she Anwen. She made Anwen not very likable, the whole time Trince was talking Anwen was ignoring him. I think that if Anwen wants to be a Binder she needs to be able to listen to people better. She needs to be more of a diplomat.
Do have any questions? Does everything make sense? Do you know what a Binder is (etc.)?
I have plenty of questions- ones I'm sure will be answered with the passage of time =)
It's just the introduction of a whole new world- a new species- that takes time to get used to- but I love it.
Yes, I agree that it wasn't quite how it should be, and I liked yours much better. I actually liked Sarah's more then this one also.
Yes- I don't really like this one.
I also didn't like the way she portraid- what's Anwen's friend's name?
It also told us too quickly and in a kind of dumb way (don't tell her I said that) her parent's death.
All in all- it was about a two out of five.
I love reading this since I know Brianne because it is SO her! It's just like her to make the guy nice and perfect while the girl has some secret reason why she "can't" love anyone. It's SO her!
That's kind of how I write mine too- but the guys are a little less perfect in mine... hers is cool.
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